Poem: Fortunate Sons

[nursedarry]

Title: Fortunate Sons
Author: nursedarry
Pairing: H/D
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Prompt: #6, Luck, fortune at poetic_hp
Disclaimer: The characters herein are not mine and I claim no possession of anything remotely connected to them except my undying lust. This writing is purely for fun and is not intended for the purpose of gain other than hopefully the gushing commnets from the reader. The title is a corruption of CCR's "Fortunate Son".
A/N: Cinquain poetry is based upon syllable count (2,4,6,8,2, for a total of 22). (The purest form also dictates the number of stressed syllables in each line, although I've not kept to this.) Didactic cinquain is based on word count (1,2,3,4,1) rather than syllable count. I've had a go working to both stipulations.





Fortunate Sons

Children
Naïve, indulged
A jealous beginning
The betrayal of heritage
Rivals


Equals
Lucky, cunning
A familiar loathing
An agreement to disagree
Comrades


Lovers
Lenient, honest
Seeing past destiny
A re-ordering of duties
Husbands

Comments

[qumabh.livejournal.com]

I'm familiar with the cinquain form. You've done a fantastic job here, very creative. :D

~Mab

[nursedarry.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much for your comment! I haven't written cinquain poetry in over *****y years, and was wondering if I still could. I've always felt that it's a difficult style to make meaningful to anyone but the author. I've always liked it, but found it a bit "reluctant" to produce, if you know what I mean. I'm really glad I gave it a go! I loved the process, despite my struggles.

[qumabh.livejournal.com]

I have a cinquain (one stanza) poem about Harry and Draco, but it's sooooo old and totally gen. Maybe I'll post it anyway... hrm.
You know, a really fun poetic form is the rondeau. If I didn't have such crazy writer's block I might actually work on a new one. :(

With your poem though, I love the progression of their relationship. So fantastic... formal poetry is fun.

~Mab

[nursedarry.livejournal.com]

Oooh, post it! I'd love to read it!

I like rondeau, but it always reminds me of Barry Manilow (yes, I know- WTF?). It's because he borrowed from the form to write "We Write the Songs". I think I learned that in school and I can't disassociate one from another now:(

[qumabh.livejournal.com]

lol :D