- The way you pull off Draco POV: you're simply a master in hitting exactly the right tone. We all know what POV means, but often writers either seem to try too hard and end up creating over the top versions of the characters or they force a bit too much of their own views and experiences on the characters so that you can't shake the writer off your mind during reading. But not so here. After a few sentences I was totally seeing the world with Draco's eyes. Amazing. - The way Draco experiences Harry - and it's just SO Harry, you nailed that boy too, even from the outside. Everything Draco notices about him, the gestures, the smell, what it does to him, the struggle inside, the way he feels and tries not to feel. It's never too dramatic but still deep. - I really enjoyed the the whole password problem idea. I would love to read more stories that spend some time on everyday stuff in Hogwarts.
I would have loved a bit more higher-rating-stuff, though (I guess that's my mood today), and I could wail for hours about the tragedy that are amazing fics that end too soon. There are short stories that are perfect in their short way (I once read this little masterpiece called 'The Big Reveal', you might have stumbled across it ;-), but this is one I'd really love to get deeper into. I feel like I'm missing out on a lot of very nice moments to come. But well, that's not a critique, just a way of asking for more.
Thank you very much for writing this story. I had a great evening. :-)
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Date: 2011-08-02 09:37 pm (UTC)What I especially liked about it:
- The way you pull off Draco POV: you're simply a master in hitting exactly the right tone. We all know what POV means, but often writers either seem to try too hard and end up creating over the top versions of the characters or they force a bit too much of their own views and experiences on the characters so that you can't shake the writer off your mind during reading. But not so here. After a few sentences I was totally seeing the world with Draco's eyes. Amazing.
- The way Draco experiences Harry - and it's just SO Harry, you nailed that boy too, even from the outside. Everything Draco notices about him, the gestures, the smell, what it does to him, the struggle inside, the way he feels and tries not to feel. It's never too dramatic but still deep.
- I really enjoyed the the whole password problem idea. I would love to read more stories that spend some time on everyday stuff in Hogwarts.
I would have loved a bit more higher-rating-stuff, though (I guess that's my mood today), and I could wail for hours about the tragedy that are amazing fics that end too soon. There are short stories that are perfect in their short way (I once read this little masterpiece called 'The Big Reveal', you might have stumbled across it ;-), but this is one I'd really love to get deeper into. I feel like I'm missing out on a lot of very nice moments to come. But well, that's not a critique, just a way of asking for more.
Thank you very much for writing this story. I had a great evening. :-)
Yara